In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online with out paying. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays,
technology
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advancement provides people
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the ability
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ability
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to share information around the world.
By
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the use of the internet, there would be no printed newspapers or
books
in the future since people can read everything online with any payment. I completely agree with the statement above because reading everything online can save
cost
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costs
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and reduce
paper
wastes
in our world.
First
of all, changing to read online can save
moneyfor
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money for
individuals and save
cost
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costs
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for businesses.
For example
, students need to buy more than ten
books
each year and having those
books
available online would save a great of money. Another example is that company
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produces
books
requires a high
cost
for making
process
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such
as ink ,
paper
, and printed machine.
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with electronic
books
would spend low
cost
and less production process.
Thus
, using electronic documents
instead
of printed ones would provide users
a
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benefit in terms of
cost
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cost-saving
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saving
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savings
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.
Secondly
, electronic newspapers or
books
could help
decreasing
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the great
amount
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number
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of
paper
wastes
and deforestation for
paper
production.
For instance
,
in
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every year, over
million
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a million
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tons of
wastes
are
papers
due to
a
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the
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high demand
of
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for
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paper
using every part of the world. The more electronic
books
were available online, the more
paper
wastes
were declined.
Furthermore
, when the demand
of
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for
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papers
decrease the rate of deforestation would decrease respectively since the factory have to produce
papers
in fewer rate.
Hence
, reading online would provide a positive impact on our environment. In conclusion, I entirely believe that printed
papers
would be substituted by electronic
papers
because it is not only free of charge
,
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but
also
environmental
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environmentally
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friendly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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