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Some people believe that uniform should be kept compulsory in every school , whereas others disguise and believe that children should not impaired with such kind of restrictions and allowed to wear whatever they want to

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There is no denying fact
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that uniforms should be
must
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 for
students
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 in their academic
life
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 . others section of society believes that they can wear clothes by their own choices without any interference .
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 debatable issue and will discuss
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 with , there are many reasons which
supports
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 that
students
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 must be in uniform .
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 and foremost is that it does not bring any discrimination among
students
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 and they are all well-treated by
school
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 staff .
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 , there will be no
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compley
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comply
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students
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 and if they are taught to stay well dressed in the
school
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life
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 . Somehow it will have a good impact
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 their
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 which may
further
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 help
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then
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 in their interviews and helo them to live a gentleman
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 , a section of society is in the support of wearing their casual clothes rather than
school
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 uniforms because of its cost . They are
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quiet
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 expensive and children grow very fast in the beginning stages of their
life
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the pocket of their parents as the fees of private schools are very high and everyone wants their children to study from a
well
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reputated
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reputed
school
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 as the
schook
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school
 name has crucial
rome
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role
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 while getting jobs in developing countries To conclude , uniforms are
must
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 but they can be provided by the
school
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 only and
their
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 can be another alternative of compulsory t-shirts only represents the
school
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 to
track suits
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tracksuits
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 which they can even wear after attending their
school
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