Today, the high sales of popular goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real need of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The vast majority of
people
are convinced that the world is faced with the intensity of
advertisement
and prefer buying things which are unnecessary for living. I partially agreed with
such
a viewpoint about the power of
advertisement
, and
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people
are dependent on the commercial.
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,
however
, the fact that
people
not
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extremely hinge on
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ad
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will be discussed by virtue of personal opinion. It is evident that nowadays society faces an extreme amount of promotion. One of the main reasons is that huge multinational companies produce new products every day, and the customers must be aware of the product. Undoubtedly, some of them use the services of marketing agencies, which apply tricky methods and motivate
people
to buy different
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. It is quite common to engage
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celebrities for the
advertisement
, one of the biggest examples is Bella Hadid who has been involved in
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campaigns
such
as Michael Kors, Calvin Klein and Burberry.
Nevertheless
, there are still some
people
who do not believe in the power of
advertisement
. For years, society has changed and became aware
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sustainable consumption. Authorities
also
maintain the idea of the right consumption
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ecological issues.
For instance
, a Journal of cleaner production has published
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research, which invokes the public to be objective and do the right choice. To conclude, the question about advertising has always been controversial for society.
This
essay partially supports the claim that the
advertisement
has become powerful and tricky due to new ways of advertising, but at the same
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I have to object
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since there are
people
who are making their choice taking into account sustainable consumption.
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