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Some people say that the Internet is making the world smaller by bringing people together. To what extent do you agree that the internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another?

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Thanks to the advancement of technology and science emerging, the presence of
Internet
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 is the most typical invention of the 20th century. It is undeniable that the
Internet
 has contributed significantly to shortening the distance between people by facilitating connectivity and communication with others. In my viewpoint, I utterly agree with the idea mentioned above that the
Internet
 is bringing us closer than ever before. On the one hand, communicating by the
Internet
 is an inexpensive and
a
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time-saving service. In Vietnam, a normal phone call or message costs hundreds to thousands
VND
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, but the cost of
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the message
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message
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messages
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 delivered on the
Internet
 is negligible. During the bygone era of the
Internet
, posting letters was the crucial way to keep in touch with relatives but it took weeks or months to drop them a line and get responded.
In contrast
, individuals with
Internet connected
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 gizmos can send and receive instant messages
in
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at
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 the speed of light.
On the other hand
, the
Internet
remove
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removes
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 the distant barriers between people from remote areas. Email, Messenger, Instagram allow people to make contact with their friends, colleagues and relatives online. Take the Covid-19 epidemic as a paradigm, a plethora of
company
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companies
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 and
school
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schools
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on
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in
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 the world use online applications to organize classes and meetings during the social distance.
Furthermore
, making new international friends or looking for our soulmates on the
Internet
 is easier by chatting on social networks. In conclusion, the
Internet
 enhancement
provide
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 human with
a better and more convenient lives
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better and more convenient life
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. It creates easier communicating environments and gradually change the huge world into
the
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 highly connected global village.
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