Many people believe that women make better parents than men and that is why they have the greater role in raising children in most societies. Others claim that men are just as good as women at parenting. Write an essay expressing your point of view. Give reasons for your answers and provide relevant example and experience you might have.
All of the people consider that
women
can be good parents more than Use synonyms
men
. Use synonyms
For
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this
reason, everyone thinks that Linking Words
women
are suitable to take care of their Use synonyms
children
the most. Use synonyms
However
, others agree that Linking Words
men
are Use synonyms
also
good at parenting same as wives. In my point of view, I concur that wives are gentler to be ready to teach their kids. Linking Words
However
, Linking Words
men
have a better power to raise their Use synonyms
children
.
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First,
every mother is so kind to their daughter or son. Linking Words
This
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residentials
. It cannot be denied that Correct your spelling
residents
women
have a better sense Use synonyms
to look
after their Change preposition
of looking
children
. A perfect example of Use synonyms
this
is mothers always prepare breakfast, Linking Words
the
school uniform, and teach them homework. Correct word choice
and the
Hence
, mothers will be the person who understands their Linking Words
kids
need.
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kid's
kids'
Secondly
, someone admits that both Linking Words
women
and Use synonyms
men
are the same. They can be the perfect parents. Especially, fathers have an open mind and lead their kids to do the right things. To illustrate, daughters usually share their stories and secrets with their fathers. Because they might think that no one can blame them if they Use synonyms
do
something mistake. Verb problem
make
Men
will compromise Use synonyms
them
all the time. Change preposition
with them
Thus
, Linking Words
men
have skills that can encourage their daughters. In fact, all Use synonyms
children
feel more comfortable when they talk to their father.
In conclusion, Use synonyms
women
are more likely to be good parents Use synonyms
more
than Correct quantifier usage
apply
men
. Because they can be a consultant to their Use synonyms
children
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such
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,
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apply
study
, friends, Wrong verb form
studying
and
food, etc. Alternatively, Correct word choice
apply
men
will be a person who keeps their kids’ secrets. So, everyone will prefer sharing experiences with fathers when bad things happen to themUse synonyms
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Coherence and cohesion
Use more formal language and avoid colloquial expressions such as 'residential' and 'mistake'. Also, ensure that your ideas are presented in a logical order and that the introduction clearly states your point of view.
Task response
Provide a more balanced argument by considering and counter-arguing the opposing viewpoint. Additionally, address the prompt more directly and make sure that every paragraph contributes to the overall point of view.