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Many people believe that international tourism is a bad thing for their country. Why do they think so? What can be done to change their views?

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Due to advancements in technology, air travel has become considerably cheap,
as a result
, more people are travelling to foreign countries.
However
, many residents hold the view that
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 in tourism is affecting their country negatively.
This
 essay tends to
disscuss
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discuss
 why some inhabitants have negative attitudes towards
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 in travelling and
finally
 provide suggestions to change
this
 view. There are several justifiable reasons why people think that international travel is a bad thing for their homeland.
First
 and foremost, due to
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 influx of tourists, local people are relocated from their locality to provide more buildings for the tourism industry. Even coastal regions and urban areas are being developed to make enough spaces for tourists. Any development involves
interferance
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interference
 with nature
thus
 contributing to negative impacts on the environment.
For instance
, in 2013 in Uttarakhand, India, there were several devastating landslides and flooding. Researchers came to the conclusion that it was a consequence of the soar in
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 of travellers.
Secondly
, more humans in an area
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 rapid depletion of natural resources and
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 in carbon footprints.
Consequently
 affecting the sustainability of the country.
Moreover
, some inhabitants fear that foreigners would bring
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 culture with them and eventually local customs and traditions would be lost.
Firstly
, residents should be employed in
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 industry so that they can
also
 benefit from it. If
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tourism
 becomes their source of income
then
 they would no longer have any objections
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 it. Government should educate and encourage
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 to welcome visitors. Government should
also
 enlighten inhabitants with the fact that visitors can help in developing the country and in raising its economical status.
Furthermore
, it is an indisputable fact that exposure to cultural diversities
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 to broaden a person's horizon. To conclude, it is legitimate for citizens to hold grudges for foreigners due to the
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 reasons.
Nevertheless
, if they are informed about the positive impacts of tourism, I strongly believe that it should alleviate their resentment.
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