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What problems does cybercrime cause, and what solutions can you suggest for ordinary people and business to take?

#cybercrime #people #business
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Data
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 over the internet has tremendously increased over
last
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 the few decades as it provides faster processing time and convenience. Many
people
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disgree
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disagree
 with
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 transition as they rightly claim about the threat of
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 being at risk. In
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essay
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 we will discuss some possible solutions to
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safeguard
 individuals and avoid cybercrimes.
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 with, Technology has provided us with the convenience of accessing
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 from any part of the world. Though the security provided on these platforms are up to the mark, individual mistakes
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 made their
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 more
vunerable
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vulnerable
 for
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hackers to commit crimes.
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 obtained by these criminals can
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 be used to blackmail for ransom.
Personal
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 and sensitive
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leak
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leaks
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 can bring huge financial and social
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losses
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 to the company or individual.
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,
people
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 should take the security measures required more seriously
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, not to share any personal passwords with anyone since, we are aware of
accounts
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 being linked to each other, one should be very careful about sharing any personal information.
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, If a hacker is able to gain access to the emails, it is much
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easier for him to hack into financial and social
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 as generally email
accounts
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 are used for password recovery purposes.
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,
people
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 should avoid downloading illegal content from unknown sources because there is a high possibility of malware in
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contents
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 which can allow other users to track and obtain
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 from your computer.
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, accessing personal
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 on public computers should be avoided and without fail,
acoounts
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accounts
 should be logged off after use.
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, Any suspicious activities should not be ignored and required measures should be taken and in case of lost or stolen
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, complaints should be raised with the authorities.
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, blocking or deactivating
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 stolen or unused account can restrict any criminal activities through one's account. To sum up. Cases of cybercrimes are increasing day by day, ordinary
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 and companies should
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strictly
 follow security protocols and adequate training should be provided by companies before allowing employees to access official
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