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“Prevention is better than cure”. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree?

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It goes without saying that preventing is better than treating sickness and epidemics. The aim of
this
 essay is to give examples and clarify why
this
 sentence is correct.
To begin
 with, we can mention the
medicine
 of India, well-known as Ayurvedic
medicine
. Differently from Western
medicine
, Ayurvedic defends that eating properly, sleeps well and do exercises are the pillars of a healthy life. While the traditional
medicine
practise
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 in
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Western countries use medicaments to treat
diseases
. Studies have been proof that Ayurvedic
medicine
 has better results than traditional
medicine
 and
this
 is easy proof if we compared the number of people who has obesity and high cholesterol in the western countries
in contrast
 to the low level of
this
 disease in India. In that case, preventive measures will be less expensive than maintaining a sick society. Apart from these
diseases
such
 as high cholesterol and diabetes, that the consequences are based on the alimentation , and for that ,
reason
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 the consequences are in a long term and difficult to see the results, we can mention other
diseases
 that can be easily prevented if educational measures would be spread between the population.
For example
, Aids and cancers related to
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a cigarette
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cigarette
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. The amount of money that the government spend everywhere to cure the population affected by these
diseases
 is huge. To sum up, prevent could have the result in a long term,
nevertheless
 is less expensive than trying to cure someone.
Besides
 the financial cost, the quality of life of a healthy person is better than the of someone who needs
medicine
 to stay alive.
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