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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

Nowadays,
air
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 contaminants and
traffic
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 have become catastrophic phenomena. Many
people
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 believe that government should increase the price of petrol to tackle these problems. I totally disagree with
this
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 statement. From my perspective, there are other effective solutions to resolve these obstacles. It is undeniable that one dominant cause of
traffic
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 and pollution are mass private car use.The biggest problem with increasing the price of petrol is that
this
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 causes growth in the
cost
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 of commute and transportation either by public transport or private cars.
consequently
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, higher fuel
cost
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 is less likely to limit the number of drivers.
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, as far as social issues are concerned, by increasing the
cost
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 of fuel
cost
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 of living would rise as well which will eventually lead to a less safe country.
People
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 may find pickpocketing and burglarising the way to earn money. In my view, other steps should be taken to control these crises. The
first
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 possible measure is equipping
the
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public transportation with comfortable seats and good
air
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 condition to persuade
people
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 to use them.
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, in my
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 many
people
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 do not tend to go to their workplace by bus during summer because of the low
air
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 ventilation system.
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, in terms of
traffic
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, authorities could build more underground trains and
air
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 railways to reduce the
traffic
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 on the road. In conclusion, I believe that while rising the
cost
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 of fuels is not a practical policy to reduce
traffic
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 and
air
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 contaminant, spending more money on extending the quality of public transportation and improving the choices of public transport services available for travellers can be good strategies.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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