Some people think that good teamwork makes a company successful, while others think that good leadership is the reason behind the success of a company. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There are different factors that make a
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successful. Some advocate that the
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behind a
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successful
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good
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, while others believe that
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good leadership is pivotal in any
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company
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. I believe that both have to be implemented in order
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a
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to grow. It is not a secret that a successful
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does not only
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and
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competitive
workforce, but
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hone
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of soft skills like
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empathy
, communicative skills and cooperation/
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.
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will not only enhance
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productivity and promote
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innovation but
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increase the satisfaction among
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employees
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and fosters
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healthy working environment.
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,
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good
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is not enough to enhance the prosperity of a
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. Another main factor is good leadership which is imperative. It is
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apparent
that
employees
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will rather want to work for a leader who is emphatic and shows respect to his/her
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and does not favour between
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.
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, by using incentives
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as paid
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day out
course programmes or subsidising health pursuit are considered to other mains to keep the
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motivated and focused.
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,
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allocates
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as
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bonuses
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the
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to do their best and foster
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healthy competition within the group.  To recapitulate, I believe that a
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cannot survive without a skilled workforce honing cooperation/
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and
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good leadership. Both are of
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utmost
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of
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prosperity of
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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