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today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extend do you agree or disagree. Give reasons for your answer and include any revelant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays Most
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 claim that attractıve advertisement strategies have
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 impact on consumer’s tendency of shopping while others believe advertisement is the most effective
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 to defining new products. I strongly agree with that statement for two main reasons which are going to explain in the following paragraph.
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shopping. They aim to look for not only quality but
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, consumers tend to purchase the most known materials so they follow actual
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 or not feel
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Countries support
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 from common brands because they notice that new companies have potential
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 of fraud upon consumers.
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 for new attempts and do not undertake responsibilities. Another reason,
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 stable same products because they do not approach risk.
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problem
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 when they try different
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brands
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 in recent years. Unfortunately, globalization effect
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purchase negatively so
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 obtain hesitation about find quality and health output.
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 are developed
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in commerce
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 (China, the USA etc.) prefer to produce with low quality and low labour in order to get high profit so they misuse buyers. To sum up, Advertisements are attractive
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 most
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shopping. Admittedly,
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 should be a researcher about try new brands.
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