The continued rise in the world's population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

There is no doubt that the
population
are increasing day by day. The cause of
this
phenomenon are varied and have led to a wide range of effects on human life. I partially agree with
this
idea and in
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I will outline why the
population
is increasing. Generally, there is a wide range of reasons why
people
believe that populations are increasing greatly. Perhaps the primary of
this
phenomenon is that illiterate person is unable to understand the
impact
of the
population
in a limited land. The more illiterate person the more
population
in their family. If they are not educated, they can not realize that increasing
population
can have an
impact
on
the
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society as well as the country.
As a result
, they produce more baby which leads to
increase
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populations
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.
Secondly
,
people
are not maintaining proper family planning.
For example
, recent UN reports show that only 45% of
people
maintain family planning which in
in
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turn increases the
population
in their family.
however
, it must be said that there are several arguments agents that the idea is populations are increasing. Perhaps the strongest of those
people
are more conscious of the
impact
of
population
. The government and the agency are trying to make
people
understand
about
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the
impact
of the
population
. As a ,
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most of the families do have more than 2 children. In conclusion, the
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of
population
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is an issue
will
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continue to demand
for
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our attention for the per seeable future. If Government agencies and individuals do not work together, the
willbeing
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wellbeing
will being
future generation could be affected by the
population
.
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