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Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) is an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.

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Boarding schools
is
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 a dream
to
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for
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 some
students
 who would love to get rid of their families or indulge themselves in
the
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apply
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campus
life
. Admittedly, there are many benefits of living
in
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campus
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the campus
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 during the term, yet not living at
school
also
 has its advantages. Here we will discuss the pros and cons in three aspects.
Firstly
, in terms of
school
life
, having accommodation
in
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on
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campus
 could definitely build up a stronger bonding with
roomates
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roommates
 and friends.
Moreover
,
students
 can enjoy less commute to
school
 and enjoy the extra
time
can
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 be spent on various
school
 clubs,
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extracurricular
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extra curricular
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extracurricular
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 activities, after-
school
 services or projects. They could utilize their free
time
 in their best way thanking for the minimal travelling
time
 to
school
.
Secondly
,
students
 could develop their independence if living without family. They have to take care of themselves, provide mutual support to roommates, wash their own clothes and dishes, prepare their
meal
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meals
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 etc. For
students
 living with family, it is not uncommon to see all housework is well done by parents and the pupil
justs
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just
 have to deal with the schoolwork. In
this
 sense, boarding schools
does
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 provide a platform for the student to train up their independence and sense of responsibility in household stuff.
However
, an offset of the fruitful
school
life
 is the dwindling
time
 in the
soceity
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society
security
 or opportunities of taking
part
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part-time
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time
 job. It would be hard for
students
 living
in
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campus
 to take a job and
this
 limits their exposure to the city's work culture. They lack the chance of equipping themselves with the basic work skills which could undoubtedly be useful after their graduation. In conclusion, every sword has two sides, whether boarding schools is a good option depends on the
students
' needs and characters.
School
 accommodation suits someone who is eager to have abundant
school
life
 yet it may not be a good choice for one who is keen on work experience.
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