Some people argue that is more important to have an enjoyable job than to earn a lot of money. Others disagree and think that a good salary leads to a better life. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Few would argue the fact that we live in a demanding society where job stress is a constant for the few looking for
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high status and monetary rewards. In
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many people claim to believe that enjoying one’s employment is more important than focusing on monetary income. In
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preferable to opt for a low-income job
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more enjoyable and less stressful? The main reason, according to those claiming it, is that being involved in a pleasing and less demanding activity reduces stress levels as well as blood cortisol concentration,
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decreasing the odds of getting physically sick and struggling with mental health issues
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the long run.
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, for those not strong enough to resist the stressful conditions of the more demanding, individual, yet rewarding jobs, stands the claim that
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less selfish employment, maybe centred on helping others, is the most satisfying task one could ever engage in. Far from denying that, I still believe that helping others is something obtainable through different paths and earning more money might be a
further
tool to implement one’s humanitarian spirit rather than just a selfish tool. Even though a high-income job may be more stressful and mentally demanding, fewer are the experiences that can surpass the overwhelming feeling of the dopamine burst of earning more money or reaching a long-awaited goal. In keeping with that, the brains of rich entrepreneurs and businessmen presented higher concentrations of dopamine and serotonin on functional MRI scans than those of their employees with lower stress levels.
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to that, a wealthy lifestyle for oneself and his own family is clearly a reason worth enduring mental fatigue and,
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the long run, will help enjoy life to the fullest. To weigh on
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athlete Conor McGregor, held the view that it is way easier to hide behind the comfortable lie of enjoying a humbler work
instead
of putting insane amounts of effort to reach higher goals that, in turn, is the real road to personal fulfilment. In conclusion, despite many think that enjoying what you do is way more important than monetary income,
this
might just be an excuse to avoid the struggle that reaching a high status and income entails. In fact, while harder on one’s energy, reaching the top tier of society and economic wellness is one of the most rewarding goals. Of course, if that were easy, everybody would be rich and wealthy and not just a minority of us.
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