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The government should allocate more funding to teaching science rather than others subjects

#government #science #subjects
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There is no doubt that
science
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 plays a crucial role in the growth and progress of any
country
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. Due to
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fact
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 some people suggest that government should provide more
monitory
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science
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 as compared to other subjects. While other subjects are
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 important for the economic advancement of the
country
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. According to my ,opinion the state should allocate funds equally for all subjects.
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 with, those countries
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 invested more in
science
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 have become developed countries. The government should allocate funds for
science
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 because it will help to bring betterment to the health and care system. The doctor can invent the cures of many diseases which will facilitate to become a healthy nation
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 indispensable for the progress of the
country
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. Our
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 made medical equipment can be export and generate in foreign exchange.
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science
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 can help agriculture to increase its growth by improving its fertility.
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, we can not deny the importance of others disciplines
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 as arts, crafts, literature and physical education. Some people are blessed with art skills that can be polished through art education. They can excel in paintings and bring name and fame through their work for their
country
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.
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, it will not only create jobs bus
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 generate revenue. Studying literature helps to improve our speaking and writing skills and we know about our past. In the conclusion, both sides of the argument have their merits but I think, we can make progress only on the wings of fair
science
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 the government spend money on all modules .
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