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As the workplace evolves, some people suggest that schools should only teach practical skills, while others believe that academic knowledge should be taught as well. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#workplace #people #schools #skills
The vast majority of people believe that
theory
 is a crucial part of education,
however
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 there is
also
 an opinion that nowadays knowledge should be
also
 practical.
This
 essay agrees that students need to develop their depth knowledge of
theory
,
however
, practical
skills
 should
also
 be trained. Both questions will be discussed. It is evident that
theory
 is a starting point of education. Most of the books in the
school
 develop their ability to learn, read and analyze various kinds of information, provide examples and express their own ideas.
As a result
, they do expand horizons and understand the reality of the basement science and nature.
For instance
, United Kingdom is
prime
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 example of where there are few levels of education
such
 as nursery
school
,
primary
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 one,
then
 secondary and high one that proves the fact that students should be
firstly
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 taught a
theory
.
However
, there are some people who are convinced that theoretical
skills
 are less important than practical
skills
. In the
beginning
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 pupils must be taught like professionals, follow their own
behavior
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 and adapt a personality, albeit,
this
theory
 is not supported by experimental evidence. To demonstrate, recent research from the Investigate committee reveal that more than 60% of pupils cannot perceive complicated material after
school
 by virtue of tiny practise in
school
. To conclude, academic experience plays one of the most important roles in
the
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future careers, whereas practical
skills
 are important too.
Nevertheless
, the practice cannot be done without some theoretical
skills
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Vocational training
  • Job market
  • Real-world application
  • Skills gap
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Technological advancements
  • Critical thinking
  • Theoretical foundations
  • Lifelong learning
  • Cultural awareness
  • Analytical skills
  • Research careers
  • Balanced approach
  • Adaptability
  • Continuous learning
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