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Many people assume that the goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods. To what extent do you agree or disagree that constantly increasing production is an appropriate goal?

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Many
people
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 share the perspective that the goal of every
country
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 should be to produce more
materials
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 and
goods
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. While others might argue
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 to that and
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 because some believe that there are other factors like quality of living which must be taken into consideration by a
country
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. On the other side,
people
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 supporting
production
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the production
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 of resources have a mindset that it is the key to make a
country
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 more developed. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both sides. In my opinion, I firmly agree that a nation's goal should be to manufacture more
goods
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.
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 with, manufacturing
materials
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 in the
country
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 is like climbing the ladder of development.
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 is because exporting
goods
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 is a major factor when it comes to
development
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the development
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 and power of a nation.
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, if a
country
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 wants to buy resources like phones or any other sorts of things manufactured in
other state
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another state
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then
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 it needs to pay an ample amount of duty taxes and shipping charges to that very province.
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, we are all aware that any products made in the US or China if brought to India or provinces similar to that need to pay heavy duty taxes. That's why states find it more profitable to produce their own
goods
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.
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, apart from making
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materials
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,materials
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 a
country
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 must take care of other factors as well like
quality
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the quality
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 of living. It is every state's duty to look after its
people
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 along with its development. To put it more simply,
focus
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the focus
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 should
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 be on things like recession problems, accommodation and congestion in the city. Appropriate measures must be taken like creating job opportunities for unemployed
people
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, constructing new buildings and rails. To conclude, the factors portrayed by two different perspectives of
people
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 are justifiable and must be taken into consideration. But it is very important for a province to be developed enough to support its population. As mentioned earlier in the essay, I hold the view that every state should make more
goods
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 and
materials
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 so that they can progress.
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