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WRITING TASK 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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 of the population believes that
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advancing technology has brought
people
 closer to each other while others oppose
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this
 notion. Personally, I concur with the fact that the internet has given us an opportunity to communicate with
plethora
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 of
people
.
However
, both
point
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points
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 of
views
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view
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 will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, current technology has made our life much easier and convenient.
For instance
, social
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media
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medias
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media
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 and applications
such
 as zoom,
facebook
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 and
instagram
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 are the major communicating tools that
people
 use to chat with their long lost pals, relatives and family despite the differences in the time zone. Not only text messages but
also
 audio calls, voice mails and video chats are
also
 used which provides a realistic environment as we can observe the activities that the others are performing.
Moreover
, even if your pals are on the other end of the globe, the bonding can still be remained via
chit chatting
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 and talking online.
In addition
, in the past few decades,
people
 tend to rely on pigeons and letters to pass
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a message
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message
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messages
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 from one another.
This
 probably takes ages to receive
message
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 from the sender. In
this
 way, the constantly developing society helps increase the bonding with different
people
 around the world.
On the other hand
,
people
 are so
focussed
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 on
the
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electronic gadgets, that they start neglecting things that are evolving around them. They tend to spend their entire day playing games or chatting on screen rather than engaging with
people
 from the real world.
This
 will eventually
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 to a decline in the number of
people
 socialising and making new friends. But, I believe that the problems can be alleviated by balancing both the virtual and the outside world. To sum up, I believe that the benefits outweigh the downsides and that, it has a positive impact on our society by building a
long lasting
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long-lasting
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 bond with various
people
.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fostering
  • Global connections
  • Isolation
  • Diminished
  • Face-to-face interactions
  • Cultural and geographical divides
  • Paradox
  • Social media
  • Alienating
  • Family dynamics
  • Echo chambers
  • Polarize
  • Marginalized communities
  • Inclusivity
  • Maintaining relationships
  • Evolution of communication
  • Instant messaging
  • Video calls
  • Technological advances
  • Collaboration
  • Remote isolation
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