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Many people work long hours leaving very little time for leisure activities does the situation have more advantages or disadvantages?

#people #work #hours #time #leisure #activities #situation
Nowadays researches proved, that there are several different ways of learning, which are
for example
 learning by doing, learning in a
group
 or learning alone. In my
opinion
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 the best way to improve especially cognitive
skills
 is learning in a
group
.
This
 essay will show, how a higher motivation and different points of
a
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view make improving cognitive
skills
 with other’s much more sufficient than
other
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 way’s to learn.
Firstly
, it is clear that the
level
 of motivation is considerably higher
,
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 when other
people
 are involved in learning.
People
 aiming for the same target , trying to either reach it together or faster than the other one, are more likely to succeed. Another advantage is social interaction, which brings
people
 together and they can motivate each other to raise their skill
level
.
People
 meet in public places and interact socially to improve their intellectual
skills
. In the
second
 place, a clear advantage of learning together is
the
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summery
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 of different points of
a
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view. Obviously,
people
 bring a variety of requirements into the
group
 activities.
Although
 they might be on a different intellectual
level
, others will certainly benefit from new ideas. In conclusion, the benefit of
group
 activities to improve cognitive
skills
 is in my opinion clearly higher than any other
ways
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 of learning. The
level
 of motivation increases incredibly with
company
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,
therefore
 the success of improving
skills
 grows as well. A variety of educational levels brings the advantage of new ideas and different points of view for the ability to overthink a thesis.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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