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Children should not be forced to develop good penmanship since computers and other mobile devices have done away with the need for having good handwriting. What are your views on the subject?

#children #penmanship #computers #devices
In
this
 revolutionary era, where
technology
 has taken over manual things, kids should be resilient enough to adopt modern
technology
. As per my view, in modern education times , youngsters need not follow
traditional
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 approach of writing through
pen
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, rather, they should be more focused on their typing speed.
Firstly
, we will discuss the impact of
latest
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 techniques on writing skills, and
secondly
, we will talk
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this
technology
 has an edge over the older
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.
To begin
 with, it is clearly evident that after the COVID pandemic the mode of education has changed from offline to on-screen, resulting
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, pen and paper
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 lost
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 importance. In
this
 mode, everyone has to type their answers on computers, which turned out to be
boon
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 for teachers as well as for teenagers. To illustrate, tutors can easily understand the writing and can trace out the spelling mistake, which was not the case earlier.
Furthermore
, we can edit and re-write anything
infinte
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infinite
 number of times, which made
this
 mode easy and convenient to embrace.
Therefore
, it has abolished the need to learn cursive writing.
On the other hand
, adopting
this
technology
 helps teenagers in their later stages, as they will already be acquainted with the system which
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 them from others.
In addition
 to
this
,
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 number of highly paid government jobs requires good typing speed
such
 as deed writer.
For example
, I got selected as court stenographer
becasue
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because
 I topped the typing exam.
Thus
, it is crystal clear that
machine based
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 writing undeniably has leverage over
paper based
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 writing. To recapitulate, I opine that change is the essence of life and change is the only thing
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 never changes.
Hence
, kids should be made advanced and
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instead
 of forcing them to continue with old techniques.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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