Some people think that the goverment is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree?
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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- secondly
- thirdly
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- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
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