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Some people warn that the era of silver screen is coming to an end and that people will eventually lose interest in going to the cinema. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

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Entertainment and relaxation are desired to refresh our minds from daily stress for which movies are considered to be one of the most preferred sources of entertainment. Some
people
 pin-point that
interest
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 of
public
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the public
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 in
bollywood
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Bollywood
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 is decreasing which will result in
shut
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the shut
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 down of the
industry
.
This
 essay will discuss that why cinemas are still
important
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an important
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 part of
community
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the community
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. 
To begin
 with, cinema helps an individual to escape from reality and forget all his worries. While enjoying these shows
people
 get completely involved in
show
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the show
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 and
link
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 with
outer
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the outer
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 world is broken due to which they feel refreshed and less stressed.
Moreover
,
people
 enjoy going
for
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to
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movies
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the movies
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 with their friends and families to celebrate small events
such
 as birthdays,
promotion
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promotions
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 and so on. For an instance, as theatres are closed due to
pandemic
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pandemics
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 public is eagerly waiting for
its
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their
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 opening. On other hand, the
industry
 provides
employement
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employment
 to many. A huge crew is required to make a film and
also
 to display it on screens. There are many professional and unprofessional workers who play an active role in
making
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the making
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of
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apply
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a movie and
decline
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the decline
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 of
this
industry
 will result in
unemployment
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the unemployment
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 of
masses
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the masses
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. Even, the income from the
industry
 supports the economy of
nation
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the nation
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 as it
as
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is
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 a multi-billion dollar
industry
. To sum up, cinemas
has
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 enormous benefits for common
people
 as well as the government.
Ending
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The ending
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 of
this
 era will be distasteful as many are dependent on cinemas for their bread and butter.
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