The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems due to being overweight is increasing. What is the reasons for the growth in overweight people in society? How can this problem be solved?

Nowadays, being overweight is
the
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one of crucial and extremely increasing
health
problems that
people
are concerned about. There are many ways to solve
this
problem
. In
this
essay, I will share my perspective about the reason for
this
problem
and the ways to decline
this
problem
.
Firstly
, the reasons
of
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being overweight are
eating
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habits and
daily
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routine of
people
. Nowadays,
people
must work hard for their succeeds and high-quality
life
,
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therefor
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therefore
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they will have urgent activities in their
life
that can cause many effects.
For example
, they must eat junk foods that
not
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good for
health
and
high
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calories because they do not have
time
for
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prepare food by themselves.
Moreover
,
people
always feel exhausted after they finished hard work and they want to relax for
this
reason they do not
to
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waste their
time
for exercise. In my opinion, changing some things in
life
can cause huge effect and solve
this
problem
, the most important things they should
change
is their mindset that they have no
time
for
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because
their
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can exercise and relax at the same
time
,
for instance
, they can
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interesting podcasts while walking 20 to 30 minute per day and they can play hula hoop while watching TV. Another thing that they should
change
is
change
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their eating habits. They should eat
a good food
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, eat more vegetables, and reduce eating junk foods and sugar in their meal for good
health
. In conclusion,
people
have to
change
a
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something in their
life
for better
health
but not only changing something but
also
having enough sleep and good mental
health
are
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crucial for
solve
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this
problem
and it has to use
time
. There are no shortcuts
for
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succeed
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Obesity
  • Processed foods
  • Caloric intake
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Nutritional education
  • Metabolic rate
  • Physical inactivity
  • Dietary habits
  • Health literacy
  • Psychological well-being
  • Chronic diseases
  • Body mass index (BMI)
  • Lifestyle modifications
  • Preventive measures
  • Healthcare interventions
  • Food deserts
  • Portion control
  • Weight management
  • Exercise regimen
  • Public health policy
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