Task 2: Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views.

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Many think that
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continuing
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in college or university always builds
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suitable profession for students.
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,others think that
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getting
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is tougher these days and recommends
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settled after finishing their graduation.
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essay will examine the outline from both sides. On the one hand, today people think that
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getting
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job
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always builds
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career
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a career
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.
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,companies are hiring certain limited time and always seek to employ new graduates to gain goodwill because it always helps them in monetary benefits.
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, providing training after getting their employment for two to three weeks.
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,youth is more enthusiastic in accepting
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job
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offer and stopping their
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before graduation because
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can cover daily and monthly expenses.
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,
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generation
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to support their families to pay bills,
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accommodation
and other expenses.
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,teenagers think that they need to settle before 25 to 35 yrs of age.
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, experience counts and getting
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job
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a job
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at
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age can always
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them to build a
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and reach
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the goal
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. From others perspectives,parents and other professionals think that if younger generations
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their
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it can help them to gain
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knowledge
in theory and practical.
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, it helps them in working place.
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,most students are working
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and studying
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can always be beneficial financially and helps in gaining placement assistance.
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, my sister did her course in childcare in
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college and practicum placement in the daycare.
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, they
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by her work and hired
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their company. To conclude, in my
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building
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a successful
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career
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plays a crucial role for teenagers.
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,
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in college or university can
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them to building
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career
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a career
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in
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suitable and interesting profession. Youth need to balance
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and
education
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simultaneously because
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can help them in gaining knowledge and experience.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Academic qualifications
  • Specialized skills
  • In-depth knowledge
  • Personal growth
  • Social development
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • Career progression
  • Professional networking
  • Education
  • Work experience
  • Successful career
  • Personal interests
  • Career goals
  • Decision-making process
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