Some people think that the only way to relax is to rest or sleep, while others say that people need to do exercise or sports to relax. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

While several
people
argue that
rest
and sleep are the best ways to get relax, others believe that
people
have to do
sport
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things
like yoga to feel better. Sleep is the way for
people
who do physical activities to get
rest
.
However
,
for
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people
who used their brains more than anything else, should do exercise to relax their
mind
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minds
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.
Although
sleep is one of the easiest
action
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actions
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that we can do whenever we have
a
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apply
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spare time, sleep
is not always be
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the best option
regarding
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for
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the
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people
who love sports to maintain their mental health.
First
and foremost, a population needs to get
rest
after doing a lot of physical movements. There are a lot of professions in
this
world that need physical efforts to perform a
phisics
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physics
as the best part to do their job. After that,
usually
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people
who do their job with their muscles will
relaxing
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relax
be relaxing
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their body with sleep or just take a
rest
for a moment.
For example
, a farmer usually does their job
since
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in
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early
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the early
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morning for digging the land,
then
he cultivates the plant seeds. After doing all
kind
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of
things
,
usually
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they go to sleep and relaxing their muscles before starting to work again.  On the one hand,
There
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there
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is a community that feels that doing their
favorite
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sport
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things
will freshening their
mind
. A study from
University
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the University
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of Brawijaya said that the best way to relax their
mind
is by doing
sport
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things
that they love.
For instance
, A programmer has been thinking
to
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too
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much to solve his problems or to make a new code that would
be improve
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their apps.
Hence
,
this
profession needs to clear their
mind
and relaxing their body with beautiful
things
or activities that he likes. The movement not only will refresh their
mind
, but
also
they could get new ideas regarding the improvement that he should apply to his apps.  To sum up, Either sleep or exercise is the best way to get relax.
However
, the options depend on 
to
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the
people
. There are
people
who will choose
rest
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to rest
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to relax
,
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or do their
favorite
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favourite
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activity.
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