In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. This is having a negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is commonly believed that global junk
food
has replaced ancestral healthy diet in some
ecocnomies
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economies
and
this
is leading to
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effect on communities and as well as households. I completely disagree with the given statement and there are two reasons why I think so and they will be explained in the
next
few paragraphs.
Firstly
, processed
food
is unhealthy. It is a
well known
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fact that packaged
food
items consist of high saturated fat due to which sugar level in the human body inclines upon consuming the
food
and it
also
increases the risk of certain cardiac
disesase
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disease
diseases
.
For instance
, eating French fries shoots
the
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blood pressure
instatntly
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instantly
in
the
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old age people.
Therefore
, consuming unhealthy stuff can give rise to many fatal
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. The
second
resson
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reason
lesson
for my view is that intake of balanced diet improves longevity in the human. It is
impertive
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imperative
to that a
nutri
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nutrient
Nutri
dense foods contain essential vitamins and minerals which are crucial and essential for the human body and these materials are abundantly present in the traditional
food
pattern .It is
also
true that taking regular meal
also
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the risk of ailment and people are able to live longer and healthy. To
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illustrate
eating green salads and vegetables not only delay the
aging
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process but
also
improces
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improves
the
menntal
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mental
health.
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, eating
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home cooked
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food
does have a positive impact on one's life. In conclusion, having fast
food
items is a contributing factor in the development of
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deadly diseases , while
a
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ancestral foods are an ideal source of constructing a sound mind.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural identity
  • heritage
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • globalization
  • nutrient-rich
  • bonding
  • local cuisine
  • fast food chains
  • convenience
  • processed ingredients
  • sustainability
  • culinary traditions
  • mass-produced
  • environmental degradation
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