The news is an important source of knowledge for all of us about the world, especially in this era of technology. Journalists are mainly responsible to bring this news to us but not all of them are true to their responsibilities and ethics. How much can we trust the journalists?

Information
is an important part of human life
especially
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in
globalization
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era. Actually, technology is leading in
this
day to give much
news
by using
media
platform
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platforms
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.
However
, not all
journalist
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journalists
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will be reliable to give the real
news
that it consumes by
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a netizen
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netizen
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netizens
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.
This
essay believes that we should not completely believe all
news
that it is provided by
media
platform as it can be truly a fact or a fake.
Firstly
, Online
media
will write
a believable
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believable news
a piece of believable news
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news
if there is
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evidence
a piece of evidence
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an
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evidence that it can be known by many sources. Picture as
,
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Coronavirus
vaccine
issue is
a hot
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hot news
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news
that not all
people
believe that it is really
safety
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. Particularly, only a few older
people
trust that it can be used for adults 50+ years so that government have to announce the chemical ingredients of
this
vaccine
by sounding to online
media
.
In addition
,
journalist
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the journalist
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has to write
this
information
by according to medicine team who is believed by government. In the
end
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it can avoid redactor to write
a fake
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fake news
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news
and it can be
a trustworthy
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trustworthy information
a piece of trustworthy information
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information
.
On the other hand
, online
media
can write
a fake
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fake news
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news
to
rich
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reach
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their goal to get a high rank in searching
engine
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engines
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.
This
is a common issue that
netizen
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netizens
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usually get when they want to find
a current
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current news
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news
that is
happening right now.
For example
, in
the
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early
of
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2020 most
people
got
a fake
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fake news
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news
about the number of
people
who died because of
Astra
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vaccine
.
Moreover
, it affected the spreading of
vaccine
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the vaccine
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that it was
distributing
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in many districts in Indonesia. Because of
this
, most netizens would often search the
information
about
this
case so that it could increase the rate of online
media
even though it was
a
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fake.
In
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can be concluded that
people
should not highly believe
to
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all
news
that
it
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is provided by
media
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the media
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. They have to check the truth of the
news
before believing completely as it might be untrustworthy
news
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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