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Psychologists have known for many years that colour can affect how people feel. For this reason, attention should be given to colour schemes when decorating places such as offices and hospitals. How true is this statement? How far does colour influence people’s health and capacity for work?

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In the past few decades, Psychologists learned that
emotions
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 of humans can change by colour.
Moreover
, choosing
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 in places is important.
This
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To begin
 with, people are growing with belief that
type
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 of
color
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colour
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 represents emotions. A clear example
for
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this
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a
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at a
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woman who wears a pink shirt, most people think she is lively, nice, friendly.
On the other hand
, a black house seems
like
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weird, sad.
This
 means that in the past, using
color
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colour
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 in order to explain
feeling
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feelings
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 by
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a human
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human
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humans
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 is
normal
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a normal
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 thing.
Additionally
, there are several research show that choosing
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a color
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color
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colour
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 for decorating places, body or mental health relief is one of the
factor
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 which scientists can prove
this
is affect
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 to
behavior
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behaviour
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.
Thus
, education about
colors
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colours
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 exists in
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the university
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university
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the university
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 of Thailand where focus on
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the influence
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 of
color
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colour
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, they have collected and gathered data and shared
on
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it on
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 social media.
Consequently
, some professionals bring
this
 knowledge and adapt
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it for
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for
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to
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 their occupations. An illustration for
this
 is interior designer studied which
color
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colour
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 suit for bedroom, kitchen, bathroom etc. While
,
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apply
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 doctors
such
 as
neutrologists
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neurologists
 use
color
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colour
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 for studying about brain function,
color
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colour
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 blindness testing by
ophthalmologist
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an ophthalmologist
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, examining
development
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the development
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 of the youth by
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a pediatrician
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pediatrician
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paediatrician
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 who is specific curing in
childerns
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children
 between 1 to 13 years old. At the end of the day, I firmly believe that influence of different
colors
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 affects
to
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human
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humans
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 and ought to bring to learning in school and college as well. If
color
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colour
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 can heal some
symtoms
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symptoms
, people will have
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long-living
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long
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a long
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 living.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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