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Success is often measured in terms of how much money somebody has earned. Do you think wealth is a good measure of success? How else could we measure whether somebody is successful or not?

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In most cases,
people
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dipect
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direct
respect
 others as
seccessful
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successful
 individuals once they have a
plentey
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plenty
 of money. In my take of
view
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 I do not think
wealth
 can be used as
measurement
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a measurement
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 of
secceed
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succeed
.
However
, there are a
varitey
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variety
 of merits that can be used to know whether a person successful or not
such
 as
a
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good relation with
reletavies
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relatives
 along with the level of education that a person
have
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.
To begin
 with, it is an incorrect way to
judeg
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judge
people
 based on their
wealth
.
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people
,
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 are far too numerous to mention, have a huge
wealth
 but they
strugling
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struggling
 in
mant
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many
 parts in their
live
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such
 as a
health
 condition and
faulier
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failed
 relations. To
illustrat
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illustrate
, rich men are always focusing on their businesses rather than their
health
 or families which is resulting in difficulties
through
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 their life.
Hence
, neither a huge bank account nor
a
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luxury
details
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surronding
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surrounding
 your life can be a fair measure of
successd
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success
. In terms of the right way of measuring a successful individual, having a good family with
a
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lovely kids is the most important
measures
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measure
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 of
successd
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success
. I
beleive
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believe
 that
seccessd
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success
 is when you reach at the retired age with a strong circle of families and
friend
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friends
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 who stand with you in the rest of your
live
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life
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.
Anthor
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Author
Another
 factor
ot
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to
 consider is
the
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body
health
 in general. being
a
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rich without a physical
helath
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health
 is not successful at all while having
a
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good
health
 with
a
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little money is a sign
means
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that means
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 that
person
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a person
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 almost
achive
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achieve
 his goals
through
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a life
the life
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life time
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lifetime
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. In conclusion,
a
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apply
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good relations with family and friends
ccould
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could
 be a perfect method to measure
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whether
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wether
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whether
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people
seccessd
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success
succeed
 or not .
However
, taking
the
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apply
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wealth
 as
measurement
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a measurement
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 of
successd
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success
 is incorrect way.
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