International community should act immediately to encourage countries to reduce the consumption of fossil fuels, such as oil and gas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It’s true that people have increasingly
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on
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fossil
fuels
since the industrial revolution. Some people argue that actions should be taken by
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community at once in order to decline the use of fossil
fuels
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the world. In my view, I totally agree with
this
claim.
First
, the substances produced from the burning of fossil
fuels
are
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great contributor to global warming.
This
is because that consuming a large amount of oil and gas can cause greenhouse gas,
such
as carbon dioxide, which can lead to a significant rise
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temperature on the earth.
As a result
of global warming, the sea level suffers from a growth year by year, so that some of the low-terrain districts may be flooded by the sea, which can lead to the decrease of habitats and growing intensive population.
Second
, the rising demand
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burning fossil
fuels
nowadays
have
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been polluting the environment to a large extent.
For instance
, some poison gas can be released
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the air by cars and bring about many respiratory diseases to city dwellers,
such
as lung cancer.
Besides
, these gases are easy to penetrate into the soil and damage the quality of soil,
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the decreasing productivity of crops.
Moreover
, the biodiversity of sea creatures
is severely
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damages
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by
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pollution.
Furthermore
, the shortage of fossil
fuels
is a cross-world and
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urgent issue, which should be tackled with the efforts made by international cooperation. There are many renewable resources introduced to the world these days to replace
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fossil
fuels
,
for example
, electric vehicles, but it is fairly not enough to cover the demand of production activities in people’s life. In conclusion, it is really an international and rather urgent task need to be addressed by
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governments and inhabitants all over the world. In my opinion, when communities from different countries collaborate together, the awareness of reducing
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of fossil
fuels
for people would be strengthened.
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