Social media is becoming increasingly popular among all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think advantages of social media outweigh the advantages ?

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In recent days,
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community is becoming rising trendy between all age
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, sharing private details on
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does have
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. I totally agree with
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have negative effects. The following paragraphs discuss both benefits and drawbacks and reach
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with, social networks shows a
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growing between
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in different ages, it has many beneficial effects between individual,
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as, share diary with friends or families,
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making relationships and meeting new
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who share the same interest things or chatting together,
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, getting famous and had many followers so that provide money from advertisement.
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, there is too many of label resource that can help students to their homework,
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exchanging emails with tutors or universities.
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, sharing private details
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many and extremely drawbacks so
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need to be more careful when they use these platforms.
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some strange
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others
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their personal information for getting some money. What is more, spread private photos
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internet users take it and share it everywhere
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network pages and making fun of it as a meme,
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, getting
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that’s lead individual to depressed and isolated perhaps to suicide. In conclusion, I would like to close
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argument by assuring that
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community has
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to different age groups,
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need to learn how to use it wisely and
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about their particular details from
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network world
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social media platforms
  • Connectivity
  • Self-expression
  • Creativity
  • Global communication
  • Instantaneous communication
  • Personal growth
  • Career advancement
  • Privacy concerns
  • Identity theft
  • Cyberbullying
  • Addiction
  • Productivity
  • Misinformation
  • Crisis
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