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In many countries, increasing numbers of people are becoming interested in learning about the history of the house or building where they live. What are the reasons behind this? How can individuals research this?

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The charts show the overall
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 percentage of
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 and the household
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 consumption shares in terms of five main categories in Australia in 2004. Overall, it is readily apparent that the majority of
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 in Australia was supplied for residential demands, and people spent the most
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 in the bathroom and the garden. In the pie chart, 70% of the total
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 consumption was contributed by local accommodations, which was divided into apartments and houses, at 13% and 57% respectively.
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 the industry consumed 11% of
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 followed by the business field at 10%.
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, 6% of
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 was delivered to government apartments and the remain 3% to other channels. In terms of residential
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, Australians dedicated about 28% of
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 the bathroom and 27%
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 the garden.
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,
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 for washing clothes accounted for 20% of
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. Compared with these areas, the kitchen and toilet had a relatively smaller
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 consumption, at 15% and 10%.
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