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It is better for young to get advice from older people than young people. Do you agree or disagree?

#advice #people
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Most young
people
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 have problems with the
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 attempts in society. Some individuals believe the old generation's advice is useful for young
people
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 than the young's advice. I agree with the statement.
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 essay aims to highlight my view by using points and examples.
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 of all, senior citizens have many and various experiences from their lives.
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, they can guide young
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 to the right and easy way in their choice.
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, as young
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 agonize about their future, they can present some solutions based on their success and failure.
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, young
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 do not need to get failure and despair. According to a study with 100 young generations, almost 70
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 of them responded that they had relied on old
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 as their parents, teachers and grandparents when they got worried and had problems.
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, being advised by their friend or similar age
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 may be a not good way.
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 have suffered from similar problems. Of course, it could be comforted by sympathizing with each other but it would not provide an efficient solution. To sum up, In summary, it may be more helpful to seek advice from adults who have experienced both failures and successes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wisdom
  • experience
  • modern challenges
  • peer advice
  • long-term perspective
  • contextual relevance
  • diverse perspectives
  • generational gap
  • mentorship
  • cautionary tale
  • evolving societal norms
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