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Some think that climate change reforms will negatively affect business. Others feel they are an opportunity for businesses. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Many individuals consider climatic changes detrimental for their business;
however
, others consider it an opportunity to grow. In my opinion, climatic
change
 creates new business opportunities. Both viewpoints are discussed in the essay. Climate
change
 can undoubtedly hurt
businesses
.
For example
, extreme weather conditions affect crops. A poor harvest will make farmers poorer and affect rural economies. When farmers do not have money to spend, the demand for products will decrease. It is detrimental for all
businesses
.
Likewise
, extreme rainfall or flooding may force stores to stay closed for days on end. All of these scenarios are harmful to
businesses
.
Conversely
, for many companies, the changing weather conditions are an affirmative way to grow. It is because climatic changes create new demands, and as the demands are dynamic, the organizations can grab the opportunity to provide whatever is needed.
For example
, in 2019, Delhi was covered with smog in October, and according to the survey conducted by the Economic Times, the sale of air-purifiers and anti-pollution masks increased by almost 100%.
Likewise
, insufficient rainfall increases the demand for rainwater harvesting systems. In the same way, hotter summers provide manufacturers
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 excellent opportunity to sell more fans and air conditioners. These examples prove that if
businesses
 are capable of catering to the changing needs of society in the wake of climate
change
, they can reap rich dividends. In conclusion,
although
 many people consider climate
change
 as bad for their business, in my opinion, it is possible to gain substantial monetary benefits from
such
 changes.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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