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Fossil fuels have been the main driver of economic growth for the last 100 hundred years. Explain how fossil fuels have achieved this, outline the main problems their use causes, and suggest alternative solutions.

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The key to business growth for several years is fossil
fuels
.
This
 essay will discuss why we use them, the
problems
 of using them and possible solutions to these
problems
. To start with there are several reasons why fossil
fuels
 are so important and make business advance. We use it in
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forms
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 of coal, oil and natural gas,
then
 transform it
to
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 electrical
energy
 or produce petroleum
that is
 still used by vehicles and machines. Using them constantly can cause a number of
problems
.
Firstly
,
air
pollution
 is the main problem. Every time the factories burn fossil
fuels
 they
also
 release the exhaust gases into the
air
. That can cause health
problems
 about respiratory tract, especially among the older and children.
For instance
, Thailand has lots of factories that extract petroleum from natural gas. It caused
air
pollution
 in the living areas and the aged needed to go to
hospital
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 because of lung diseases. Another factor is that it releases carbon dioxide which is the key cause of climate change into the atmosphere.
That is
 why it can lead to many
problems
such
 as flooding and global warming. The most effective way to stop
this
 problem is alternative
energy
.
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that is
 produced by fossil
fuels
 should be replaced by alternative
energy
. These days we are having many sustainable energies from wind, solar (sun), hydro (water) and thermal (heat). All of
this
 can generate electricity that we can use in vehicles and households.
Moreover
, the government can publish policies of
air
pollution
 that limit
burning
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 of fossil
fuels
 in living areas and public areas. It can help people to avoid breathing
the
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harmful gases. In conclusion,
although
 fossil
fuels
 have benefited us for many years,
it
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 can lead to a lot of
problems
 about health and the environment. We can avoid
this
 problem by using alternative energies
instead
 of fossil
fuels
 and the government should provide
effective
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an effective
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 policy about
air
pollution
.
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