In many countries people have to pay for medical care but some think that it should be a free service provided by the government. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I would like to keep an open mind on the notion that states that healthcare should a

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paragraph. I truly applaud the kind gesture of the government making medical care a free

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. Because everyone from any walk of life

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right to be treated when ill and should be nurtured back to health. Nobody life should perish due to the fact that medical bills are

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when the bills are tremendously high

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tend to search for the alternative way of curing illnesses,eg using essential oils to treat sinus infections which have zero effectiveness against the cause. Or the most common thing of taking antibiotics without knowing if it’s either viral or bacterial infection these

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tend to do more harm than good leading to more complication

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the long run. The worse of cases is believing in pseudoscience which sounds true but

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speculation that drinking pure ethanol would kill the COVID viruses. All these cases are the product of

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proper access to healthcare or simply not being able to effort to see the proper professional.

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in mind that there is bad in every good because making health care a free

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every taxpayer. Because there must be

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funding in order to treat the patients. And the income of the government income

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tax money. So there might be a possibility that

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have to pay more tax than it

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to. So

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have to work twice as hard

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the usual living and basic amenities will

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increase making lower class citizens unable to effort. I believe that healthcare might be free but basic needs aren’t.

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important thing is the quality of the

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given to the patient. Who is going to monitor the quality of the

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free health care with bad quality will increase the toll of

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we cannot forget the likelihood of the system failing because there isn’t a sufficient fund to support the

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the previous paragraph I prefer to side on the fence making sure every possible outcome is properly accessed before making it official.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

universal coverage
equity
fundamental human right
out-of-pocket expenses
financial hardship
preventative measures
social contract
quality of care
high demand
limited resources
tax implications
budget priorities
universal healthcare systems
public health
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