Internet crime is increasing rapidly as more and more people are using internet to make financial transactions. What can be done to tackle this problem?

What qualities would the perfect
parents
have ? In my opinion, I think that there are three things the perfect
parents
would have is
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, Love which everyone
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known
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. If you are a member or a part of your family ,
parents
always would love you without reason or expectation. They just love you and give you everything
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they have
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you are a child until you are an adult. They can give you all of money, property, knowledge.
Secondly
, Encouragement which the
parents
give you when you have some failure in your career path or work. You just stand up and come home , you will receive sympathy from your
parents
and they don't ever ask you why do you fail or what did you do. It makes you easily overcome
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these obstacles in
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life.
Finally
, parenting is not
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important because anything
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they teach you to make you become who you are. Nowadays, we all have to face many problems of social life on social media and we need to know or understand clearly
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or right way , even we must
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choose a proper way to do something. It's crunch time we need to get some good advice from their
parents
to do it better.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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