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Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays
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 buildings are being constructed which add charm to the city outlook. Some
people
 argue that the
government
 should lay some protocols regarding the layout of a building while some are of opinion that builders should be allowed to design according to their wish. In
this
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i
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 will discuss both views and shed light on why
constructers
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constructors
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 should be allowed to choose the design.
To begin
 with, if the
government
 actively participates in
desingning
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designing
 a building it will be beneficial for
environment
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the environment
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. The
government
 will ensure that during construction no or less harm is done to
environment
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the environment
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 by keeping a check on
quality
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the quality
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 of materials used, cutting of trees done to clear the base for construction and so on.
Although
, the
government
 will safeguard
rights
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 of
people
 as if
habitat
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 of
people
 living around is not damaged. For an instance, private builders
deploit
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deploy
 houses , community centres and many more if they feel the need to do so for their own profit.
As a result
, many are left homeless.
On the other hand
, financers of a project want to have full control over every aspect of the construction as they are investing a fortune.
Furthermore
, they need full command because
the
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 need a good return out of their investment which could be affected if
project
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the project
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 gets delayed or any changes are introduced because of
the
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govermental
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governmental
 interference.
Furthermore
, if freedom is given
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 of constructions will pay back society by giving extraordinary services. To illustrate, if a mall is constructed it will give jobs to local
people
 and boost the economy of
city
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. At
last
, investors should be given complete freedom but the environmental norms and the rules which safeguard the rights of
public
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 should be given utmost importance.
Hence
, rather than giving deciding powers to one
sector
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 both departments should work in collaboration so that maximum benefit could be achieved.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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