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It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subject. What are causes? And what will be effects on society?

#countries #students #study #science #effects #society
Science
 and technology
has
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 done wonders because of
its
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 brilliant inventions. Despite
of
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many benefits innovation gave to society a decline in interest of
students
 in studying
science
 for higher classes is observed. In
this
 essay reasons and consequences of
latter
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the latter
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 will be discussed in subsequent paragraphs.
To begin
 with, there are two main reasons, because of which most of the
students
 choose non-
science
 subjects for higher studies.
First
 is studying
science
 needs
hatdwork
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hard work
handwork
 and dedication as it is a difficult subject to learn. Another reason for the same is that
science
 involves both
theoratical
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theoretical
 as well as practical work. For an instance, learning a chemical formula is not enough it is important to know about its formation, uses, implementation and so on.
Therefore
, it is not a piece of cake to
excell
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excel
 in
field
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the field
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 of
science
 its need sheer hard work and dedication.
As a result
 of
less
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science
students
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,students
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 the department of technology will have
lesser
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 number of scientists resulting in slow development. The pace of advancement will decrease its speed because there will be lesser inventions. Considering, medical
students
 are needed to improve quality of life if graduates will not study medicine the quality of life will get affected as no new researches related to disease and its treatment will be carried out.
Furthermore
, there are many inventions of
science
 which
has
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 made life easy
such
 as
internet
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the internet
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, these innovations need
maintainance
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maintenance
 and
ehnhancement
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enhancement
enhancements
 which could be done if we have more
science
 scholars. In conclusion, it is important to motivate learners to opt for
science
 because it is crucial for
development
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the development
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 of
nation
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the nation
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 as well as for
better
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a better
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 lifestyle.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Math)
  • Perception of difficulty
  • Early exposure
  • Engaging experiences
  • Career opportunities
  • Practical applications
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural norms
  • Critical fields
  • Innovation
  • Economic development
  • Global competitiveness
  • Public health
  • Environmental issues
  • Scientific progress
  • Educational standards
  • Biodiversity loss
  • Healthcare services
  • Medical research
  • Job prospects
  • Research and technology
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