Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subh=jects like science and Technology are more important than History.

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world while others believe

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many things about successful people and their failures and successes that if students think about them and choose them as their role models, these can be so useful to build their

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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subh=jects like science and Technology are more important than History.

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