Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subh=jects like science and Technology are more important than History.

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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subh=jects like science and Technology are more important than History.

Your opinion

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

In a number of countries some people think it is necessary to spend large sum of money on constructing new Railways land for very fast trains between cities. Others believe that money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both the views.

In some countries there are more young people choosing to enrol in work-based training instead of attending university. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Many people believe that lecture halls have been replaced by online learning. To what extent do you agree or disagree?