Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subh=jects like science and Technology are more important than History.

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school that some people think
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are more important.
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some think
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and Technology are the most significant subjects based on
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world while others believe
History
is the important one. In my idea, all school’s skills are essential for
children
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like genetic
science
and computer
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uptodate
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but
also
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opportunities
that they want to do after
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graduation
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In addition
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and innovation abilities of
children
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history
has been a part of human beings life ever. There is a myriad of merits story in
history
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many things about successful people and their failures and successes that if students think about them and choose them as their role models, these can be so useful to build their
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future
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, puiples need to Know about the
history
of their countries or even an
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innovation
like telegram and
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electricity
that it can be an inspiration for them. To conclude,
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