Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subh=jects like science and Technology are more important than History.

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world while others believe

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many things about successful people and their failures and successes that if students think about them and choose them as their role models, these can be so useful to build their

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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subh=jects like science and Technology are more important than History.

Your opinion

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation. Such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both points and express your opinion.

Parents of obese children should be punished for making them fat. Agree or disagree?

Medical professionals such as doctors or nurses from poorer countries often migrate to richer countries to work. What problems arise from this situation? What measures can be taken to deal with it?

Many peope who care for the elderly do not have enough time to look after them.what are the problems related to this.What are some possible solution

Directors of large organizations earn much higher salaries than ordinary employees do. Some people think it is necessary, but others are of the opinion that it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.