When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration for many. Others, however, prefer different other aspects of a job over the salary they earn. In your opinion what are the most important aspects of a job?

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salary that are crucial like
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satisfaction, promotion and many more .
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personal life because there are so many
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demands of the
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relatives , daily expenditure and so on . albeit,
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prices of stuff thrive .
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always thought about the revenue while selecting a
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. according to the studies , most of the
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people
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. on the flip side, there are various humans who
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they are getting is supreme.
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is pivotal that if you are working in admirable
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high income
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they will have gratification during
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. to illustrate, few of my colleagues left the high paid jobs private jobs and start
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because it will give them social
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work-life balance is
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trust that it is better to do something that
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and motivate us and provide happy life .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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