"Prevention is better than cure."Out of a country's health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Better diet, preventive measures, genetic manipulation and easy assess to the health care system have increased the longevity of the general population.

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health education and preventive medicine. I fully agree with

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analysing the benefits of healthy pursuits

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as better diet and regular exercise, as well as

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of unhealthy habits e.g. smoking, convenience food and

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lifestyle will prove it. It is undeniable that healthy pursuits prolong the longevity of individuals. By allocating a share sum of

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for preventive purposes, the

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will not only invest in

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population but

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save money

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expensive treatments and lost productivity.

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, in several research studies, a better diet has

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to reduce

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of physical ailments

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, heart diseases and even cancer. Not only

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body metabolism increases by regular exercises, but

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the levels of stress and depression alleviate.

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, the suggestion is fully supported that a proportion of

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should be diverted

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preventive measures which

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more cost-

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smoking habits have been declined over the

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two decades because of the ban, convenience food and the sedentary lifestyle have become a ubiquitous part of

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contemporary society. People are

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unhealthier than ever, and there are predictions that

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development only going to exacerbate in the

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, the documentary, "Supersize me", reveals that unhealthy food combined with the lack of exercise seldom lead to obesity. Related diseases

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as fatty liver and

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are some of

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that

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obesity. It is well-known that obese individuals are less likely to be employed and

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constitute a greater burden to society.

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, the

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ought to raise awareness about the danger of

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lifestyle through investment in health educations and campaigns. In summary, it is evident that putting money in prevention than cure is a win-win investment for everyone. I

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agree with

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proposition that the

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should allocate their

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preventive medicine rather than paying for costly treatment.