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Some people think that it is necessary to travel to other places to learn about other cultures. Others say that books, films and the Internet can be used as a source of information about different cultures. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Different
people
 have different views regarding travelling and learning about various
cultures
. Some see the necessity to
travel
 while others feel that the
internet
 source will be sufficient for learning various
cultures
. But for me travelling is the best option to learn about
cultures
. Travelling gives us the best
experience
 ever. It gives us an opportunity to see and
experience
 vast
cultures
 and traditions directly. Different places have different
cultures
, languages, traditions. So, as we
travel
 we will have the opportunity to
experience
 them in life. What a person sees is well remembered than listening or reading. So those
people
 tend to
travel
 directly to learn about other
cultures
. As
people
travel
 they not only have the chance to know various
cultures
 but
also
 to know various
people
 they
travel
 along.
On the other hand
, some feel that the
internet
 or movies will be sufficient to know
cultures
. The
internet
 source has a wide range of
information
 about any place or culture which we need to know. It
also
 provides us with images and videos that are more than enough to know about various
cultures
. Books
also
 provide us with a lot of
information
 that one can understand in simple terms. These sources help
people
 to know the
information
 they need without travelling, thereby making it simpler. One can simply sit near a desktop provided with the
internet
 and learn the necessary
information
.
Finally
, my opinion is that travelling is the best option to learn about various
cultures
. Because it not only gives us life
experience
 but
also
 provides us with the chance to know our self-interests and brings out the courage in us. I feel that
people
 should spare time for themselves in learning new
cultures
 rather than simply reading books or looking through the
internet
.
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