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These days, many university courses are offered through the internet. Some people think that online teaching has more advantages than conventional classroom teaching or lectures, while others claim that there are significant disadvantages. Do the benefits of online teaching outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, leading
universities
 like University College London, Imperial College London, University of Toronto have started offering online
courses
 across a spectrum of subjects.
This
 has sparked a debate about
pros
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 and cons of these
courses
. In
this
 debate, I think that the advantages outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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. Recently, many
universities
 across
world
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 have opened a selection of their
courses
 to an international audience via the internet. The benefit of
this
 development any student across the globe can access the lessons sans
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geographical constraints. Everyone
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 now has the opportunity to learn from the best educators from the best colleges. Any person can now learn through these
courses
 without age,
reliogious
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religious
 or racial barriers. Most of these
courses
 are
self paced
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 and the pupil can manage their learning according to their grasping ability as the course material can be watched
anytime
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 of the
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day. Many
courses
also
 offer an option to download the material for future references.
Hence
, the pros can be summarised as access to all at
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time
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times
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 and
place
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.
However
, every coin has two sides, the online
courses
 have downsides as well. Every subject cannot be taught through
this
 medium. Certain subjects require lab work
which
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 cannot be offered here.
Thus
 limiting the scope of the platform. There is negligible personal contact between the teacher and learner which hinders the
problem solving
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 process for students. The learning through discussion among students, an essential part of any subject, is limited when the course is available through the web. Moving to
evaluation
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 process, though the professors give assignments and conduct examinations, everything is done virtually.
Thus
, they are non proctored exams where answers can be plagiarised from multiple sources. So, the authenticity of these
courses
 is doubted by many people which creates ambiguity about
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 of the certificates. Some
educatiom
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education
 platforms charge substantial amounts for
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 of certificates which may not be affordable for everyone. I have pursued multiple
courses
 on Coursera. I feel fortunate that I could learn from educators from
Universities
 like Oxford, Cambridge, etc. Gaining knowledge from subject matter experts sitting at home was a blessing for me. I think that many students from developing countries who could not attend the best of global
universities
 consider themselves lucky that we can learn from the best of particular fields. To draw
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, taking into account my personal experience of online
courses
, I feel that learning relevant subjects from
world class
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 professors from the comfort of our homes at convenient times is the best thing that could have happened for
global
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the global
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 student community.
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