Give information about diagram. Make comparisons

The given flow chart demonstrates the way in which
noodles
are made for the food industry. Overall, it is clear that
whole
Correct article usage
the whole

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process
consist
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consists

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of 8 main stages, begging with the storage of flour in silos while ending with the sealing and labelling
noodles
.
To begin
with, the flour
come
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comes

The plural verb come does not appear to agree with the singular subject the flour. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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to safe silos in order to storage
then
water and oil add flour and they mix up with mixer reach up to homogene. Following that, Rollers move the mixture to the
dough
sheets, the
dough
separate
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separates

The plural verb separate does not appear to agree with the singular subject the dough. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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similar
dough
strips. In
subsequent
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the subsequent
a subsequent

The noun phrase subsequent stage seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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stage,
dough
strips transform
form
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the form

The noun phrase form seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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of
noodles
discs following
this
,
firstly
these
Correct determiner usage
apply

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each
materials
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material

The singular quantifier each is followed by the plural noun materials. Consider changing the noun to the singular or using a different quantifier.

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cook with oil under average heat and wait until drying. Later,
noodles
put
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are put

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the
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in the

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cups and add some
of
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apply

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vegetables
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the vegetables

The phrase some of vegetables may require the use of the article the. Consider inserting the before the noun in your sentence.

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and numerous spices. End of the period, the cups label the brand and information of ingredient and seal so the
noodles
prepear
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prepare

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