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#information #comparisons
The given flow chart demonstrates the way in which
noodles
 are made for the food industry. Overall, it is clear that
whole
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the whole
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 process
consist
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 of 8 main stages, begging with the storage of flour in silos while ending with the sealing and labelling
noodles
.
To begin
 with, the flour
come
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 to safe silos in order to storage
then
 water and oil add flour and they mix up with mixer reach up to homogene. Following that, Rollers move the mixture to the
dough
 sheets, the
dough
separate
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 similar
dough
 strips. In
subsequent
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the subsequent
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 stage,
dough
 strips transform
form
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the form
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 of
noodles
 discs following
this
,
firstly
these
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apply
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each
materials
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material
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 cook with oil under average heat and wait until drying. Later,
noodles
put
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are put
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the
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in the
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 cups and add some
of
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apply
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vegetables
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the vegetables
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 and numerous spices. End of the period, the cups label the brand and information of ingredient and seal so the
noodles
prepear
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prepare
 deliver to the customers.
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