Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

At present
people
are divided into two
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in
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of dependent on each other. Many are believe we are dependent on each other
on the other hand
some
people
think we are more independent.
This
essay will explore both sides of
this
term.
Firstly
,
i
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will discuss why we are still now
depedent
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dependent
on each other and
secondly
, some independent
things
discussion. In
socity
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society
humans
are very much dependent on many natural and artificial elements. it is so common in
this
era. There are lots of reasons why
ethnic
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group
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groups
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are dependent.
First
of all, they are not able to do everything. Like some countries produce vegetable and fruits in a big number and they
heve
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have
enough for survive so that these country export these kinds of
things
. They import fruits and
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because they are unable
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ti
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produce.
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we get various kinds of help from
other human
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another human
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.
For instance
,
fisherman
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fishermen
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catch the fish and they sold it on market, we bought it
by
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money. By doing
this kinds
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of
things
both groups
altemately
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ultimately
alternately
get the
benifit
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benefit
. Money is
imprtant
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important
for
fisherman
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fishermen
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and fish is necessary for other
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people
.
On the other hand
, a good number of
people
believe
nowdays
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humans
are more independent. It is
also
true for many examples. At
this
moment, technology is a big factor
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our daily life. We did lots of work
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this
. Even some technology works like a human.
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as
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Robot
.
Roboot
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Robot
Robert
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can
did
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some particular work like
humans
. In
term
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of food,
people
are able to produce
vegetable
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vegetables
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and fruits by using other countries soil. Another
things
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is at present
people
are more
self dependent
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and powerful for some technology. As well as,
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of governments in
world
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the world
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give free access and permission for any work or travel.
For example
,
few
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years ago economically
humans
are very much dependent on rich
people
but
nowdays
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they
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the
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they
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do job and earn money
freedomly
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freedom
. In conclusion, in
this
stage of
gllobalaization
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globalization
sometimes
people
dependent
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are dependent
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on
large
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a large
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number of sources which source handle by
people
, at the same time, there is a
lots
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of
sector
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that which are totally free.
Although
,
i
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think at present
people
are more dependent.
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  • interdependence
  • globalization
  • technological advancements
  • collective action
  • digital evolution
  • minimal reliance
  • direct interaction
  • empowered
  • access to technology
  • societal expectations
  • personal choice
  • leverage
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