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The number of people working online from home has grown in some countries. What advantages and disadvantages can come to this trend? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #home #countries #trend
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It is irrefutable fact that technology has advanced with leaps and bounds
Therby
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, E working has
gaining
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 popularity in many nations of the world .
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save
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time
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 and money as
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 major merit and effect the outcome as
principle
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 demerit. Commencing with the prominent benefit, working from home help to save the
time
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 and expenses that people spend while arriving into the offices
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For
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 example, it is generally seen that there
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number
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 of people who work in
another cities
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another city
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 they have to
incurred
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hefty
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 amount of money on daily basis to cover
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 distance that
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 consume more
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. e working help to reduce both.
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, due to the aforementioned
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 it is advantageous.
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, the drawback of the same is , it
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 the goals of the company as staff don't under the strict supervision at their home as they on working places so, they do not care about the work and companies goal . In
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regard
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 a survey was conducted by the business community that 60%of the companies face failure because their employees join internet working . In conclusion,
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, working from home is effective in
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 and
money saving
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 yet, it may big reason
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 bad results that companies have to face due to lack of proper surveillance
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