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Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #art #children #school #waste #time
Nowadays, there is a highly debate about whether
art
 should remain
as
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a crucial subject at
school
 or not.Some people admit that
art
 should be
considerd
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considered
 as one of the compulsory subjects
school
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of school
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 curriculum because it
help
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 to enhance students imagination and release stress.
On the other hand
, some individuals opine that
art
 is not worth for pupils' time since they should put more afford and concentrate on the main subjects.Personally, I sided with the opinion that
art
 should be taught at
school
. 
To begin
 with, children will have space to develop their ideas and imagination through pieces of
art
 they
creted
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created
cremated
, they are able to express
the
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 emotions,thoughts and
creativities
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creativity
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 through their work which cure them
from
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 depression and stress.
This
 happened because kids perceived
art
 as a subject with 'no right and
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answer
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, so they are allowed to be themselves as much as they desire.
Furthermore
,it is another
helpfut
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helpful
 alternative for them to discover themselves before they stepped
in to
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 the real world.
For instance
,
the
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 recent study showed that the average
pupils
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chose
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Art
 for their major in universities rose dramatically in the past decades.
On the contrary
,
individauls
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individuals
 may claim that kids ought to focus and put an extra afford
on
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 other important
question
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questions
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such
 as Math,Science or International
launguages
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languages
language
.
Therefore
, they will have more
oppotunity
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opportunity
 to widen their
acdemic
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academic
 skills for their
further
 study; which will lead them to several stable and
high income
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 occupations.
For example
, students who are eligible for pursuing a
doctor
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 degree need to get high scores on both Science and Math,
this
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mean
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 they. need to study harder to
achive
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achieve
 the achievement In
conclution
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conclusion
,despite the perspective of believing that
art
 is a waste of
pupils's
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 time,I firmly believe that
Art
 should be a
compulsary
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compulsory
 subject in
school
's curriculum due to the fact that it
broaden
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 children imagination and
disminish
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diminish
 their depression.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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