Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is considered that as
languages
fade out, the world will be a better place. I strongly agree with
this
and will discuss my reasons in
this
essay.
Firstly
, I think it will be better if
languages
fade out in the world today so the rate of
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conflicts can be reduced. Over the years, it has been noticed that
group
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of people who speak different
dialete
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dialects
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tend to disagree and fight over issues like land, natural resources, power, and so on, which
also
happens at national levels too.
For example
, two groups of different native speakers name Ijaw and Urhobo in the southern part of Nigeria had some disagreements because of
a
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certain land in 2001 that resulted
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a fight
which
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lasted for about a year and took lots of lives.
Therefore
, if some
languages
can gradually wipe out from the earth, peace will be promoted among people and countries.
Secondly
, I believe another reason various
dialetes
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fading out will make our lives better is
because
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it will improve world trade.
That is
, assuming English is the only accepted language globally,
then
a person from Britain can easily go to China to buy and sell goods without and compromise,
hence
, enhancing international
trades
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.
For instance
, the Nigerian military always buys weapons from America and not from Russia because of the possible language barriers between them. If nations or groups have
similar
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tongue
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,
then
there will be more trade interactions between them and better their lives and economy. To conclude, I think life will be less stressful if several
languages
die out because it will minimize conflict and enhance global trades.
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