Some people believe that professional workers such as doctors and teachers should be paid more than sports and entertainment personalities. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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which profession should be given more pay. Few folks argue that sports and entertainment personalities should be remunerated less in comparison to
doctors
and mentors. I completely agree with
this
thought and will be reasoning in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
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doctors
and teachers
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vital element of society. They are expected to work
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to serve the people of the nation.
For example
, in
this
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every sector was in lockdown except
doctors
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put themselves at risk to cater
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needs of the patients.
Moreover
, even teachers worked on assignments to get their students
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online. Healthcare professionals are always expected to be on
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to serve
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society.
Furthermore
, a doctor or teacher has to
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studying all their life as
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is advancement in the field of medicine and revised syllabus each year.
Also
to mention, there is effort and struggle in every profession while keeping in mind that sports
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and actors are not deserved to get
this
high pay. Entertainers and
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athletes
work half a year for a match or project and enjoy long vacations, in
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they do not always have to put themselves at risk for the community. Another point to mention, that to become
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a student invests a high amount in education and almost a
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to become a famous and successful practitioner. In conclusion, there are various professions in the world and each human being has
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struggle of their own. According to my perspective, that
doctors
and teachers not only deserves
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in
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pay but
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more respect and rewards which is getting diminished day by day.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Professional workers
  • Societal contribution
  • Scarcity
  • Market forces
  • Consumer demand
  • Role models
  • Economic impact
  • Revenue generation
  • Fair compensation
  • Social equity
  • Intrinsic rewards
  • Job satisfaction
  • Media rights
  • Merchandise sales
  • Public figures
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